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Please read and let me know what toi think of my description of a 6 mois old baby!

A young baby sts in it`s baby chair, curling it`s small delicate fists around the sides of the chair.
A small innocent smile graces his face as his blue eyes gleam with happiness as he looks around him.
Sensing an unsettling feeling in his tummy, his bottom rose lip upturns and his face insatntly flushes.His striking blue eyes wells up with sad tears while his eyebrows furrow and then upturn.
A slight trickle of salty tears trail down his soft rosy cheeks until he gets back into the arms of his mother.
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So did toi like? This was english homework one night and my teacher read it out to the whole class...I was mortified cuz no-one at school had ever heard my writing!
Plz lemme know whatcha think:)
 Jisbonsessed posted il y a plus d’un an
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ScottishChic said:
I loved it.

No wonder your teacher read it out to the class!!

Well done Jisbonsessed!

Really great!!!
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Maachi said:
I really liked it..very descriptive,you get a sense of being there.
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