salut guys can toi help me with somthing???

I have the first chapter of a new possible story but I want to see if anybody is going to read it...
And I was wondering can toi guys read it and tell me what toi think in a commentaire ou email?
And I don't no the name yet so can toi guys help out with that to? Its not very long ou hard to read.Oh and I can give toi a link to it.

And there my other story mysterious l’amour toi can check out on the spot articles.