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salut do toi like this poem i did about alice and jasper's love?

these two were insepreable
the trust and l’amour in his eyes
made her feel sûr, sans danger
when she smiled
it brightened his jour
the thrill of the adventure
the adventure of l’amour
was making alice and jasper
fall ever so passionetly inlove
l’amour is like the wind
toi cant see it
but toi can feel it
l’amour folowed jasper and alice
because they were destined for eachother

twilight_lover9 posted il y a plus d’un an

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TEAM-EDWARDxxx said:

I Like it...

But is okay i guess.. maybe sum plus stuff bout like vampires haha that would be interesting..

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toi could just go to the request a peom question and say that u kno! but thanx! for the tip

twilight_lover9 posted il y a plus d’un an

Little_Cullen said:

l’amour it. Punctuation a bit funny, but the actual écriture is really cool. I especially like the bit about he makes her feel sûr, sans danger and her smile brightens his day. I l’amour it. Keep it up!

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thank-u so much

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twilightgirlNo1 said:

i think its great but some of the lines could be a little better.

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twilight0girl said:

it's a perfect poem about them.

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Twilightpup said:

Its really good , toi should make one about Bella and Edward

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emilyemmett said:

That is really good!! toi should write another one!! Maybe about the meadow ou Jacob and Renesmee ou something!

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sessa123 said:

Its not bad, i always thought a poem used to jus have to rhyme but narr its really gud maybe fix up some little thing and maybe have a good thing to rhyme bout, like werewolves, vampires anything MDR KEEP IT UP HUN XX

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