Sonic fan Characters Article: Ruby the hedgehog spy Part 8

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posted by zelda4559

I woke up in the hospital. "you're finally awake" cream says cheerfuly "hi, cream what's up" I say "nothing really, but toi are not hurt badly so toi can get out of the hospital today ou tomorro" cream says "thanks, bye the way who toke me hear" "the abulince did, but sonic came to help you. Don't leave without a plan suivant time" "ok cream, how did sonic know I was there" I ask "well Rouge spoted toi go in Eggman's base. she was looking for a chaos emerald" says cream "thanks cream" Then cream gets a text message for tails "what is it about" " Tails wants me to go to his workshop for a plan ou something, bye ruby" cream says "bye" The suivant morning I got out of the hospital. I walk along the plage until I see a bottle with a message. I heard about notes in bottles the notes always say diffrent things. I pick it up and get out the note. "what's this" I say lire the note. It was some kind of plan with the chaos emeralds. "collet 7 and toi will get vitory" I say lire the word part. I run to tails workshop. I see tails and cream "hi" I say "hey, ruby what's up" Tails says "I found this plan with the chaos emeralds" I say taking the note out and giving it to tails. "This could help defeat Eggman" Tails says looking at the paper "How bout Emma" Tails and Cream look at me "Might work" says Tails "Good, time for revenge" I say "Not to bad, right" Cream says "No, just to get her in jail for some time" I say "okay" cream just says. Later sonic walks in "what's that tails" Sonic ask "Ruby found it, how many emeralds do we have" "5 I think" sonic says "ruby, do toi have any" cream ask. I pull out the two chaos emeralds that I had "I made Rouge give me one" I say "Let's go then, I can get knuckles to help us" Sonic says "Knuckles?" I say confused "I'll tell you" Says cream.

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zelda4559 This one isn't as long.

Milesprowerfan But it's still good and has a sort of, "flowing" if you will. Most stories need to have a "flowing style" that isn't choppy or it's not good. I should know. Very nice.

shadowruby RUBY THE HEDGEHOG IS MY HEDGEHOGS NAME!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

MephilesTheDark RUBY THE HEDGEHOG IS A VERY COMMON NAME AND YOU ARE BOUND TO FIND ANOTHER CHARACATER NAMED IT!!!!!!!!!!!!!! Seriously, this is exactly why I avoid common names. Also, to the author of this, if you want an editor, I'd be more than happy to critic, edit, and so on... For I can see places where improvement is much needed, and hopefully you're open to such. Keep that in mind, and you can message me the stories to edit, if you want. A/n: By 'edit' I mean stuff like add paragraphs, correct grammer and spelling, add little things to make it better, take things you really don't need, etc...

MephilesTheDark Here, I'll edit this one right now, for you... I take in a breath as I wake, and internally explore my body. Were am I? I open my eyes, and allow them to wander. I realise I am in a hospital. A young rabbit obscures my vision, "You're finally awake!" She smiles cheerfully. "Oh, hi Cream. Wwhat's up?" I ask. "Oh, nothing really, but you aren't hurt badly... So you can get out of the hospital today or tomorrow!" Cream explains. I nod, "Thanks. Oh, and by the way... who took me here?" "The Ambulance did, but Sonic came to help you. Don't leave without a plan next time!" The rabbit smiles again. I love her, and how consirned she is for my safety. I can look after myself, but she always insists herself upon it. "Okay Cream." I smile. "Say, how did sonic know I was there?" "Well Rouge saw you go into Eggman's base. She was looking for a Chaos Emerald" She explains. "Thanks Cream." There was a beep, and the Rabbit pulls out her phone. It was a text message from Tails. "What's it about?" I ask, curious. "Tails wants me to go to his workshop for a plan or something, see ya, Ruby!" Cream says. "Bye..." There you go, some of it... I ran out of time, so I'll stop now. Just PM me if interested.

zelda4559 your good.

MephilesTheDark Keh, have to be somewhat okay at writing to be an author. XD So, yeah, just message me if you want me to 'edit' your stories. I'd be more than happy to~