Max: HOW DARE toi EVEN montrer YOUR FACE HERE!!!
Zack: BACK OFF MAX!!!
Star: STOP PLEASE!!!
Max: GO étoile, star NOW BEFORE toi GET HURT!
Star:*tears rise in her eyes and steps back*
ZZZZ BOOM Zack shoots at max. A nuage of dust clears
Max:*a force field also clears and Max is on all hooves* really, that's the best toi got I always new toi wear WEAK
Zack: WHAT
Max: toi heard me
ZZZZZZZZZ BOOM, BOOM, BOOM
Max:*same thing as before* HA! now its my turn black swirls of dust cercle around him then a bright glow orbits around him standing in aw Zack stares, unlike étoile, star just looking in horror for she knows what comes next
ZZZRRRZZZZZRRRRRZZZZZRRRRZZZZZRRRRZZZZRR BOOM!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
a figure came out of the dust, but it wasn't max well it wasn't him anymore.
She herd a rriipp sound the it was all red(BTW this is all happening on a cliff)blood red then a blue loup came out from the red he didn't have much blood on him just on his claws, teeth, ears, and some on his tail as if he dipped it in red paint
"are toi scared?" asked the blue loup tilting his head
"I don't know should I be?" étoile, star asked taking a step closer"
"IF toi COME CLOSER ILL KILL toi TOO" he yelled
"kill? w-what do toi mean kill?! WHO ARE YOU!!!"
"*dose an evil laugh* toi don't get it do toi your plus stupid than Zack!!!! I KILLED ZACK OK!! oh speaking of KILL I have plus to, do don't toi have a school filled with alicorns? ill stop there then of to toi parents house!!!!!"
"YOU WOULDNT DARE" she yelled
"would I?" he smirked the ran off leaving étoile, star in tears she glanced to a body in blood wings and horn clear off walked in fear suivant to it the face made her jump "zack...." she looked up then flew off to her school but she was too late blood was on the walls like a horror movie with words in blood saying:
SAY par TO UR MA AND PA FOR THE LAST TIME @$% !@#$
she walked over all the bodies until she hard a help it sounded like princess twi, the school principal she ran to the sound there in a room twi was under some bureau étoile, star used her magic to lift them off her
" thank toi étoile, star know I need your help that loup is a threat I need to kill it ASAP
"WHAT NO!! we cant!"
"why not it kill dozens of colts and mares I thought toi would care"
"I do but that loup is max..
"WHAT étoile, star I think toi need to lie down"
" *rolls her eyes* he used black magic the spell of night claw he's just under his control that's all"
"then why is max blue?"
"UG I DONT KNOW but we cant kill him I l’amour him even if he did kill Zack, Sara, Zoey , Ruby and other ponies but it wasn't him"
"LETS GO" yelled twi
"and save him from the spell" shouted Star

LOOK OUT 4 PART 3!!!!!