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 Chapter 1
Percy's POV 
      Percy and Jason were marched through the city of New York, his city. As he looked around he saw many things including death, fire and the prison they had just left. They were humiliated, defeated and the gods were cast down from olympus. Giea had used her powers not to kill them but to make them human they lost all their powers and all they had was sight and immortality so forever they would see the world in ashes.
         As they walked through the New York percy remembered all that led up to this point, different pictures from the last month, from not letting her hand go, falling to Tartarus, holding each other and only by the light of his sword being able to make out her bonds hair on her cheek, the small grey streak, her beautiful grey eyes. Annabeth, he wondered he couldn't bear to think what they would do to her. Then he remembered them stumbling out of the house of Hades, almost being blinded by the light. There was hope after that, we thought we could win, we had found out how to defeat Giea while in the pit, the sphere. But then after that all hope seamed to diminish, Giea found out we had it, she sent dozens of monsters and we were overwhelmed. They took they took us captive, the evil snow goddess took Frank and Hazel, we never saw them again. 
        Eventually I contacted Grover with my empathy link, I told him what happened, but it was to late the Romans had attacks camp half blood. I got an idea. I told him to tell Drew, the only charm speaker at camp besides piper, too go on top of the big house and use coach Headges extra megaphone and yell, "FREEZE". It worked then she told them what was going on why Leo bombarded New Rome, and all that had happened aboard the Argo II, then she said that the the remaining five plus Nico were captured, and that both Rome and Greece need to team up and head to Greece. Grover told me that Octavian stepped forward and started to argue but a knife came out of his back. It was Reyna.       
          She said that Octavian was a spy of the Earth and she overheard him talking to someone over the IM that Percy Jackson showed us. She said that he was planning on leading Rome to destroy the Greeks then while the Romans were there invite a monster army into the borders. The two camps then set of to save the last five. 
          One morning Annabeth insisted that she heard something but we all waved her off, except for me, because I knew they were listening and watching us so I hadn't told anyone about my conversation with Grover. Before we knew it the roof came crashing down and one of Leo's siblings jumped through followed by Conner Stoll an Reyna. Reyna said,"well well if it isn't the The defeater of titians Jason Grace and The Hero of Oympus Percy Jackson defeated and in chains. Allow me to savor this moment." "Dang it Reyna would you just cut the chains." Jason demanded. Reyna raised her arms in defeat and Conner went to pick the locks. But it was to late monsters had charged in and just as I got free I was knocked to the ground, the last thing I saw was a hellhound rip the head of of the son of Hephestus. He woke up in a different place he was with them still and they were alive all of them, Jason, Nico, Reyna, Piper, Conner and Annabeth. Guards came in and unlocked him and Jason and led them out side. And pretty much sums up all that happened up untill now. 
          Percy and Jason continued to be paraded through the city until the two guards who were escorting them turned into and ally and said we're almost there. Me and Jason looked at each other and we knew that "there" was execution. When they passed by the east river the heros looked at each other and nodded Percy made the water reach up to them grabbing the chains holding their hands behind their backs and the water froze into ice when they covered them. Then the boys pulled with all their might and broke the ice freeing their hands. Surprised the guards jumped and Jason punched one out and Percy snapped the neck of the other. They grabbed the guards swords and ran for the prison in hope that they may save their friends. 
        They snuck in through a window and found where their weapons were being kept.Percy grabbed Riptide and Jason got his coin but before they left the room somthing cought Percys eye. He walked over to it and grabbed it, it was Annabeth's Dagger. He quickly grabbed the dagger and put in a backpack he found in the corner. 
           As they snuck through the prision looking for their friends they saw many rooms. There where desks, and whiteboards and books. He suddenly realized that this was a school, no not just a school, this was Goode. Percy didn't even want to think about what happened to the students and teachers. "Oh no" he thought, what happened to mom and Paul, were they alive or were they... He didn't think about it and forced himself to go on. Finally they found them. They were still chained to the wall when they got there. "Percy!", Annabeth said,"how did you escape"? "Be quiet we don't want to be discovered." Jason said. Percy ran to the door and said,"don't worry I am going to get you out of here, Conner walk me through it, I need to pick this look, Jason cover me. Just as he said that guards started coming in. "Percy" Annabeth said. "Don't worry I will get you out of here." Percy said. "No Percy there are too many monsters and Jason may be good, but he can't hold them off forever." She said. "No I can get you out." Percy insisted. "Percy, go!" She demanded. Percy looked up, she had tears in her eyes. Annabeth never cried, ever. He then realized that he had to go. "Athena allways has a plan Percy, even if she has lost most of her powers, she allways does, and allways will Percy, allways." Annabeth said Percy forced a nod. 
           "Hurry it up Percy!" Jason yelled. "No, we're going" Percy said, Jason looked over and saw Annabeth, he nodded towards the window. They started to head to it fight of all of the monster and Jason climbed in the window seal and smashed it with his blade. "Come on." He said. I put riptide into my pocket but just before I jumped off of the three story building Percy took out the knife and stabbed a monster with it. He held it out and said, "I will bring it back ok, I promise" Annabeth nodded. He took a last look. Annabeth, Piper, Reyna, Leo, and Nico. Then he jumped knowing he just made a promise he could never hope to keep. 

1) Is Leo dead?
2) Gaea, Gaia :)
3) You might have switched between 1st and 3rd person a couple times.
4) Try vary your word choice or maybe adding in a bit more description to make it flow better.
Just some advice *shrug*. But you don't have to listen to me. :) I really like the idea and I'm looking forward to reading more. Update when you can!

1:^^ no look at the end Imention Leo
2:meh
3:thanks I have never written one before so any constructive cirtism is welcome

Dont kill Annabeth!!! Oh yeah, or anyone of the rest of them. For some constructive critisism, always only has one l. Also what Karaoke_Leo said, you should use different verbs to add variety when you are talking about something. Like instead of aways saying walk, you could say glided, or stride, etc. And if you are doing a POV, it has to be in first person. Otherwise, this story is good and it gives a new outlook on the whole giant war. I like it. Post soon!

I think I will post either twice a week or just once because of school

Well I finished another one because I couldn't focus on homework and had to write this down so yay another chapter anyway there is a line in here that will kinda be a internal struggle through out the story if you can figure out what it is you get cake :)


Rebellion-if Giea won
Chapter II
Percy's POV

As I jumped out the window I knew I would never see Annabeth Chase again. Right before I hit the ground two arms grabbed me and breaking my fall, Jason I knew he would. "Where too?" Jason asked I thought for a split second then answered, "The River. We need to get out of
New York." Jason nodded and we took of sprinting down the street.
We knew monsters were following us but we didn't stop until we got to the bank of the river. As soon as we stopped monsters attacked us, we took out our weapons and cut, slashed, and jabbed until Jason finally said,"how do we get across." That was something I hadn't thought of. I knew Jason could fly across but what about me? I could swim, then I quickly looked at the river and realized it was to far across, besides there was no telling was Giea has put into the water. Then I remembered something. It happened a few years ago, before the Romans, Before Giea, even before I defeated Kronos. I was helping Clarisse on her quest to get her dads war chariot back to his temple. It had exhausted me, but maybe if I was by myself it would not tire me out so quickly. I had decided there was no other way and told Jason to fly to other side.
For a few seconds I had second thoughts but then I knew I had to do it. I summoned two waves to form on either side of me and I willed them to crash down on the hordes of monsters trying to kill me. I jumped into the water but instead of sinking into the depths, I willed the water in lift me up. I looked at my feet, small little pillars of water were moving around my feet and ankles. I started running but it didn't feel like running. When my feet hit the water it didn't feel like the ground it felt as if I was gliding across the river.
"I can't wait to show this Annabeth" I said aloud. But then I remembered I had left her I would never be able to show her how much fun it is to run across the water. I was not strong enough to save her.
Just as my feet made contact with solid ground Jason landed next to me. After that we ran, by even with all of the training we had, we got tired. Our full sprint turned into a run,then to a slight jog, and finally to a slow walk.
After what seemed like hours we finally came across a town in what I think was New Jersey. We had ran through the night and we were both hungry and tired. As we walked through the small town I saw a tiny cafe. "Let's go get some coffee." I said. Jason looked at it like he thought a monster would burst through the door and charge us. But it didn't happen, "You go get us some bagels and coffee, I will be right there" he said and then he walked off.
I headed towards the coffee shop and stepped inside just as a man with a nice coat passed me on his way to what looked like the restroom. I looked at where he was sitting and noticed that his wallet fell of his pocket. I picked it up and headed to the restroom so it looked like I was just being nice and returning it but as soon as I got out of sight I slipped it into my pocket.
After about two minutes of waiting I left the restroom and went up to the cashier. I ordered two coffees and four bagels. As I handed the girl John Wescots (which was on the mans ID) credit card I realized that this was the first time I ever had stolen from someone and it wasn't a prank at camp. It felt wrong but I knew I had to do it.
As I went to a table and sat down I saw Jason walk in with a newspaper in hand. He sat down, grabbed a coffe and a bagel, and pushed the paper towards me. I grabbed it and read the head line "BREAKING NEWS: 100% of all governments have been toppled by Jennifer Green and her private army. She has recently crowned herself world dictator." I look up and say," Jennifer Green?" "Well not like she can call herself The Great and Powerful Earth Goddess Giea." Jason stated." After that we just sat in silence not saying a word.
When we had finished we left the building and headed for the highway. When we were alone Jason said," how did your get the money for that" I looked at him and tossed him the wallet. Jason opened it and said,"You stole this?" "How else will we survive." Jason handed it back obviously as shocked as I was that I took it. We continued on until we heard an ear piecing screech. I looked up knowing that sound could only mean one thing. The return of Mrs. Bacon, the Clazmonian Sow.


Did I do better with the POV this time???
And just saying that is the picture of the clazminian sow I found it on the camp half blood wiki when I was trying to figure out how it was spelled... Yeah...

No comments?

Sorry I didn't comment sooner! It's really awesome but I was confused on one thing, The part with Jennifer Green. I think that if you wanted to add her in their like that you should have at least given her some background instead of just throwing her in there. The picture is really cool though. Please post soon!

Jennifer Green is Gieas alias, she can't just go around saying "I am the earth goddes bow at my feat" now can she

Well how was I supposed to know that if my knowledge of your story is limited to what you tell me?

I dId say that Jason clearly says it near the end :)

Hey my reader/readers (not really surest this point) anyway here is the next chapter

Rebellion-if Giea won 
Chapter III
Jason's POV 

When I heard Percy mutter, "stupid piece of bacon" I almost laughed. "How bad could it be", I was 
cut of when Percy pointed towards to the sky and saw what he was so scared of. It... was a giant flying pig. This time I did laugh, "a flying pig? Never saw that before." I said. "So how do we beat it?" I questioned. Percy looked at me and said, "I was on a Pegasus, I recruited the help of a giant statue and two stone lions to kill it. Jason, we can't kill this thing, we better run." I smirked and said," we'll see." and with that I flew into the air. 
          Ok maybe I was bit over confident, and maybe I was just trying to show Percy up by killing this thing but, now that I look at I realize I have no logical plan besides trying to grill it with lightning. Well it's a plan, I charged the hog and called lightning down to strike it on the back. When it made contact there was a giant flash and smoke went everywhere. When the smoke cleared I saw that I had hit the wing sending it crashing to the earth. I looked at Percy who was running to the dazed pork chop willing water from the nearby stream to crash down into her face. After it got up I was standing beside Percy waiting for his cue to charge. But that cue never happened, because before either of us could respond, it was already up and charging. 
          It slammed Percy to the ground several yards away, and it knocked me down in its path. Just as I saw the things foot raise above my body sure that its grotesque toes would be the last thing I ever saw green vines sprung up from the ground wrapped around me and pulled me away. When I stood up I saw a boy, he looked about fifteen years old. He had blonde hair and was about five feet and eleven inches. He wasn't skinny but he was slightly less muscular than the kids at camp Jupiter would be. He had brown eyes and was caucasian. He had a bow in his hands and a quiver with a single arrow in it on his back, on his belt he had a a dagger made out of celestial bronze, or imperial gold I couldn't tell. He was wearing jeans and a Old Navy T-shirt. 
         "Who are you" I demanded. Honestly I should have been polite, he just saved my life, but I didn't care right now. "Markus Shepard." He said. Markus drew his bow and fired an arrows into the monsters ugly eye. Mrs. Bacon wailed and when I looked at her eye it had completely melted away. When I looked back at Markus he had already reloaded, although I could have sworn I only saw a single arrow. He fired his second arrow onto the other eye, but I watched it this time. When it made contact the tip melted into the eye and the shaft fell onto the ground and shattered like glass. When I looked back the eye it was squeezed shut and the pig was screaming in pain. When it opened its eye again there was nothing there but an empty socket. I starred at it in shock until I heard someone scream"Jason!"
     I looked over and saw percy running at the monster followed by a stream of water. I knew what he wanted me to do, we had done it many other times while fighting off larger monsters I willed lightning down and electrified the water and percy sent it into the screaming monsters mouth electrifying it to death. Both Percy and I collapsed and I forgot all about Markus, until Percy said,"who's that" nodding towards the archer.
      I looked over and said,"Markus Shepard, beyond that I dont know a thing about him." Markus looked at us as if he was deciding what to say,"Markus Shepard, son of Demeter, Legacy of Apollo." "Demeter, like goddess of wheat and stuff?" Percy asked "Yes son of Demeter, just because my mom is the goddess of harvest doesn't mean I am not powerful, I saved his life." He said nodding at me. "Jason." I said, "and this it Percy, thanks for that by the way, if it wasn't for your would be a hoof pressed pancake." I said " but that bow, it just melted the pigs eyes." I said.
       He looked from me, to Percy, to his weapons,"it's just a bow, the quiver is what makes it special, it was a gift from my dad, he was a farm hand from Texas. The quiver is called velvet shot." He took it off of his back and I just realized how it looked. It was purple with red stripes going around it in a spiral, inside the stripes there where pictures of arrows that had white tips, just like the arrows that he shot into the eye of the pig. "It supplies an infinite amount of arrows but if I am ever in major danger I can call upon two arrows that the tips are crafted out of Stygian ice. When the arrows penetrates the targets body the ice melts sending water from the Styx into their body melting them from the inside out. But it is limited I can only use them once every two weeks." I was shocked, it seemed evil but the arrows just saved both me and Percy so who was I to complain. "So are you guys going to DC as well?" "Why would we go to DC?" Percy asked. "You didn't know? There is a transport of prisoners to a super max prison there, the prisoners are from New York, my bet is that they are Half-bloods from the war" Markus explained. My eyes widened, I looked at Percy and I knew was thinking the seem thing I was. Annabeth was in that transport, and he would stop at nothing to save her. Even if it meant sacrificing himself to save her, and I couldn't let that happen. From that point onward I knew that it was my personal mission to keep Percy Jackson alive and fighting Giea. I knew that Percy Jackson must survive no matter the cost. 

Wow just realized how short this is... Sorry anyway there is some foreshadowing in here but maybe not in the way you think hope you are liking it so far

Well teamleo... Try not to spoil anything

OH MAI FREAKING GODS. I only have one word for you : AWESOME. Please post some more!!!!

Rebellion-if Gaia won
Chapter IV 
Jason's POV 

      As we traveled fought of many monsters until we came upon the outskirts of Washinton D.C. As we walked down a newly paved road we heard a low growl. "Did anyone else hear that?" Percy asked. "Yeah, but what was it?" I answered. "Uh... I think, I just discover big foot." Markus said. "Huh?" Percy and I asked at the the same time. Markus pointed down the road into a forest. Rumaging threw some berry bushes was somthing that looked to be eight feet tall, but it had hair all over it's boddy minus his face. The beast had two faun like horns on the to of its head and had berry juice dripping out of mouth.          
"Oh no" Percy almost whispered, "that is an island satyr" "so it is nice?" Markus asked. The island 
faun, I mean satyr looked up from his berrys and stared at us. "They use to live on islands in the Mediterranean Sea where they fed on sailers that landed on their islands but I guess they like the big city better" Percy said. The monster  continued staring at us until Percy said, "we should get out of here... Like now." 
Just as we backed away the monster ran at us, "MOVE" Markus screamed. Like that wasn't 
obvious anyway, I still jumped out of the way though. Markus and I jumped to the left into the forest but Percy went right further into the road. Unfortunately it turned to the right almost like it knew where we were going. It grabbed Percy by the torso and Percy struggled trying to get out, he franticly looked around for what I assumed to be water, there wasn't any. The monster threw into the forest and he smashed into a tree. I pulled out my spear and charged. I dodged to the right when the monster swoop at me with his big meaty hands. When I had a window to stab him I trusted my spear into his side. He howled and looked down at me. He yanked my weapon out of his side and tossed it out onto the streat he then grabbed me like he did Percy but just before he was going to smash me onto the ground he stopped. I looked at the things stomach and saw Markus' dagger sticking out of it. The grip losend and I fell to the ground. I ran over to my spear and I stabbed him in his fat hairy neck. The monster fell to the ground and we ran over to Percy. He was just getting up and when he saw us he said," hey guys, did we kill it". "Yeah we did, come on I think we are almost there." Markus said. 
         Apparently almost there means four to five hours out to Markus but we still got there.We climbed up tree and looked around. There was a thick forest all around and in the middle was a clearing large prison with walls capped with barbed wire all the way around it. "Ok, I wil climb around the tree tops and look around some more, you guys can set up camp, ok" Markus said. We both nodded and climbed to the ground.
        When we got to the ground I asked," ok what are we looking for?" Percy thought for a second then said, "caves, abundance of plants anything that could keep us hidden." I nodded then said, what are we going to do after we save Annabeth?" Percy shrugged then said,"we will cross that bridge when we have a master planner back with us." Percy joked. I was about to respond but Markus ran up and said," I have an idea." We set up camp and spread a crudely drawl map outlining the prison exterior on the ground. "Ok" Markus said,"I scouted it out and there is much more security in the south most wing of the prison i think that is where she is being held, lucky for us there are some pretty tall trees. Now I have a plan on how to get in but... It is risky." "How risky" Percy asked him "one of us will have to get captured."        
        Me and Percy looked at each other and both said,"I'll do it" "Jason no, I have to do it she's is my girlfriend." Percy said. "No I have to you would be more useful on the outside I would catch the forest on fire with my lighting" I demanded. "Markus is there any water outside the prison?" Percy asked. "No, but" Markus tried to say, "see no water all I offer besides that is a sword." I said,"you're pretty good with that sword though!"
      "ENOUGH" Markus almost screamed, "I will flip a coin, heads Percy gets to go, tails Jason." He took a quarter out of his pocket and flipped it into the air. He cought it and set it on his arm. When he lifted his hand I saw that it has landed on heads which ment Percy goes in. "It's settled Percy will go in, wait for riptide to return to him then shut of security. When it is down Jason and I can get in and free Annabeth. We can start in the morning." Percy and I nodded and headed to bed.
       In the morning markus and i climbed a tree that over looked where Percy would try and "break in". Percy walked up to the front entrance sword in hand and killed the first two guards before they knew what happened. Then almost automatically more guards came out. Percy stood his ground and I have to admit I was impressed the way Percy fought switching back and fourth from greek to roman style. He waited for a while until he let some one knock his sword out of his hand. Then he dodged a few times before he let someone punch him in the chest then hit him with the but of the guards sword knocking him out. Every fiber of my being was telling me to run in and help him but just as I was about to they picked up riptide and dragged Percy into the prison. 



Sorry I haven't posted in a while I am kinda of waiting on maiden4ever to wright my prophecy but I haven't heard from her, I should be able to get a few more chapters out though comment if you like it and i will be back soon :)

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