HELP: wrinting a editorial for english needs to be 300-500 words i got 200 need plus ideas.

First of all, toi should make it clear in the first place that you're écriture this as an exercise of analyzing Jack Knowels' "A Separate Peace."

Secondly, I'm sorry, but I haven't read the novel, so I don't think I'll be of much help. Could toi give me some background on the novel, maybe?

EDIT: I CAN help toi with grammar.

"After some time accueil Phineas returned, shortly after he returned he was questioned about his injury with all the confusion of what happened, Phineas ran out of the building and slipped on the steps."

You're a bit redundant here. Also, this is a run-on sentence. Change some commas to periods. Consider this bit, too: "After some time accueil Phineas returned, shortly after he returned..." You're repeating yourself, see? I'd take out one of those clauses.

There are a few other redundancies in your text which I think you'll discover as toi reread it.

As for suggestions to help make the piece meatier, toi say a lot about what should be done but toi don't explore how these things should be implemented. What if the school is short-staffed and can't spare teachers to watch kids at all times? What if they don't have the money to hire more? What do toi mean when toi say "teach students to be sûr, sans danger and responsible"? sûr, sans danger in what way? Will a plus structured lesson plan and less time to relax stress the students out more?

Also, toi introduced the idea of blaming someone in your first paragraph, but never suggest who you, the editor, think should be blamed for the incident. toi imply that it's the teachers and lack of supervision, but if this is really an editorial, your opinions should be far plus apparent and scathing. Think of yourself as a movie critic. Editorials are opinionated. They're one of the few pieces of journalism that's allowed to be opinionated. So... give your piece an opinion!