Here is chapter two, commentaire please

(Still Jason's point of view)

Jason watched as the ship came to shore, the figure jumped from his spot and landed cleanly on his feet. Jason asked "who are you?" The man replied "name's Sinbad, yours?" Piper took over and a dit "I'm Piper, that's Jason, and that's Leo." Sinbad looked at them, and he asked "your demigods right?" Jason nodded and a dit "I'm the son of Zeus, and Piper is the daughter of Aphrodite, and Leo is the son of Hephaestus." Sinbad replied "pleased to meet you." It was quit for a moment an then Jason asked "would toi like a tour of the camp...

salut guys!! I'll be uh posting a prévisualiser of the fanfiction I'm gonna post. Basically a crossover. Just tell me what toi think of it, and I'll post the rest as soon as I'm done. [Hi book-worm!! *waves] So yeah. There. After this. Hah. Okay.



1. SADIE: Camp...Strawberry Services?!

Hey – okay, wait a second…[taps on microphone] salut Carter! Is this thing working? What – of course I’m asking you! You’re the nerd here! [silence] Oh, ah, I see the tiny red light. Never mind, it’s working!
 

Okay, let me start that introduction in a better way. Ahem. Long time no see, mates! Sadie Kane is back,...

Annabeth

I was walking through the trône room, talking to my mother, Athena. Yes, the goddess of wisdom and war strategy. We were admiring my work.

"Very good Annabeth. I'm glad to say my own daughter is-- A SPIDER!!!!"
I looked at Athena, confused. I'm not a spider! That's when she pointed to her statue and screamed.

I cringed, then looked at the statue. How bad could it be? The worst thing that could happen is it could be a- "SPIDER!!" I screamed.

I looked at my mother, terrified. Her grey eyes were wide, full of fear.
"DON'T LOOK AT ME!! GO GET SOMETHING SO WE CAN KILL THIS DESPICABLE THING!"...

salut guys, i was just wondering, judging par this prologue, would read my fanfic if i wrote one? now, im not saying that i'll actually be écriture one, cuz i have a really busy summer, but i just want your opinion of it. like, is it any good? I would HIGHLY appreciate constructive critiscim. i want toi to nit-pick. Spelling mistakes, grammar, choppy ou awkward sentences, run-on sentences, being too descriptive, out-of-character thoughts ou actions, stupid/weak ideas, anything! just be polite about it :)
PS: i know, its a bit long for a prologue, but i couldnt help myself!

And voila! Here it is:

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