i just wrote the first chapter of my magical life can yu plz read it and tell me what toi think i promise you'll like t=it and plz dont be harsh thnx

...Lol.

Problem 1: You're asking for my honest opinion, and yet toi say "plz dont be harsh", which leads me to believe that toi are only asking for praise. 98% of the time that is the case with toi kind of people.

Problem 2: "You kind of people" being the grammar fails. I'm incredibly hesitant to read any piece of écriture par toi because I'm doubtful that I'll actually be able to read it. (I can't stand txt tlk.)

Problem 3: "My Magical Life." No, does not capture my interest even slightly. It sounds like just another boring teenage novel written par a naive daydreamer. Not that there's anything wrong with the latter, just the former.

Have a nice day:)